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[carnivore-x]

Sorry for the long wait everybody, I've been pretty lazy busy lately, but anyhoo, here's the next part.

Chapter 2.5: The Betrayal

   The tolling of a grandfather clock brought Dr. Fetus back to the present. It was almost midnight, and he was a bit tired. He trudged up to the third floor, crawling into bed and sinking into the covers.
   But his sleep was uneasy, full of dreams of Brownie, Bandage Girl, Meat Boy, his father, Inspector Barton, Jensen with a syringe, salt and needles, Jensen with a syringe, sneaking closer, creeping up to a crack in his jar...
   Dr. Fetus tossed and turned in bed, then snapped awake. Jensen wasn’t sneaking in his dream. Jensen had a syringe in real life!
   Dr. Fetus jolted upward, springing out of bed and startling Jensen.
   “What are you doing?!” Dr. Fetus shouted, shoving Jensen back. “What is that?”
   “Your-your...medication, sir,” Jensen said.
   Rage filled Dr. Fetus. He had no medication. Jensen had been poisoning him, for who knew how long. Something in his mind snapped, and a cold clarity came across the world.
   “I don’t have a head problem,” Dr. Fetus said, advancing menacingly. “Nothing is wrong with me, after my second birth. Rage just breaks the effects of this drug you’ve been feeding me!”
   “Please, sir, it’s not like that!”
   “This drug is keeping my mind under, keeping me from thinking clearly. That’s why I could build myself a new suit, but now can do nothing!”
   Dr. Fetus began to laugh, almost insane. “I am just as powerful as before!”
   “Please, sir, don’t hurt me, I only did what I was told!”
   “Who told you?” Dr. Fetus roared, punching Jensen out of the way. “Who?!!?”
   Jensen gasped, the wind knocked out of him. “Sir...please...”
   “WHO!!!???” Dr. Fetus kicked Jensen.
   “Brow-nie.” Jensen whispered. Dr. Fetus paused.
   “BROWNIE!?” he bellowed. The traitor still haunted him, had always haunted him! He had been keeping Dr. Fetus away all these years, and Jensen had been working for him!
   Rage filled Dr. Fetus, more powerful than anything he had felt before. He could feel the effects of the drug struggling to keep his mind under, but it was wearing off. A new power began to bubble up inside of him. Something he had made, something in his suit he could use...
   Jensen, realizing what was happening, grabbed the syringe and lunged forward, trying to return Dr. Fetus’s mind to a state of lethargy.
   Dr. Fetus roared, and the two grappled, Jensen trying to stick the syringe in, Dr. Fetus trying to keep it back.
   “Brownie... you can’t win!” Dr. Fetus shouted. “I will destroy Meat Boy, and Bandage Girl will be mine!!!”
   With these words, he launched Jensen into a wall, cracks splintering it from the impact.
   A blue glow began to surround Dr. Fetus, and he seemed to hover in the air. The suit radiated pulses, pushing him off the ground. A living gravity orb. Almost by instinct, he flipped Jensen off.
   Energy crackled through his suit, fuses sparking and taking their cues. With a surge of electricity, a huge blue laser, in the shape of a hand flipping someone off, blasted Jensen out through the wall, shooting him onto the lawn. The laser spawned from Dr. Fetus’s  suit hand. He stared at it in wonder. This was true power, this was what Jensen had been hiding from him!
   Dr. Fetus lunged out of the house, landing without any problem. He could obliterate anyone with a flick of his middle finger.
   “At last, Jensen, I can finally destroy you,” Dr. Fetus said. “You betrayed me, and your life is forfeit.”
   “That...is what...you...think,” Jensen coughed. “You know......better than....any...anyone...that...that...that...nobody here...dies for...forever.”
   Dr. Fetus laughed. “That’s where you’re wrong, Jensen. I have the power. I reign supreme! My laser can kill anyone... for good!”
   He raised his hands, and flipped Jensen off with both both of them. A huge yellow laser, more powerful than the blue one, the same shape but larger, blasted forth, plowing into Jensen. There was an explosion of electricity and sparks, and then Jensen was gone. Dr. Fetus grinned, excited by the new powers revealed in his suit.
   Dr. Fetus glared at the pile of ash that was formerly his traitorous servant. He was done with this pathetic life of luxury. He turned on the mansion, and began to float into the air, activating more of the suit's newfound abilities.
   Focusing as hard as he could, he blasted the house with a huge, burning red laser. The house caught fire, and exploded, launching smoldering rubble all over the yard. Dr. Fetus glared, and pulled out the remote. It all seemed so simple, now. With a single thought, he repaired it, and pressed the button. An explosion swirled around him. He was back in control, and more powerful than ever!
   Dr. Fetus grinned, and turned in the general direction of the sea, wings flapping. This time, he would destroy Meat Boy once and for all!
   Brownie couldn’t protect them forever. Brownie, who had turned on him. Brownie, who had trapped him in this horrid, rich life on the third continent. Brownie, who betrayed him at the Salt Factory, when it really counted. Brownie...

Alright, that's all for now. I'm going to pick this back up, I promise. Again, sorry for the long wait.

[carnivore-x]

Alright, time to enter the Salt Factory!

Chapter 3: The Factory

I

   Dr. Fetus stared at the entrance to the grand factory. Bandage Girl was held tightly under his arm. He shivered. Memories seemed to float out of the factory, calling to him. He stared at the sign over the entrance: Fetus Corp. Salt Factory. The place produced salt, stored it, preserved it, transferred it, piled it in random places.
   Dr. Fetus stalked into the factory’s entrance hall. The entire place had become completely automated after he had taken over and slain all the workers, along with the Foreman: his father.
   He set Bandage Girl up. One thing he loved about his factory was that it was incredibly deadly, even without him creating traps. The hospital was nothing in comparison to the dangers the factory posed. Oh, he would still add in a saw here and there, but the abundance of salt, missiles, and moving platforms over huge pits made it perfect.
   Dr. Fetus grinned, and began taking his own private tour of the factory. The place had done well in his absence. There was salt everywhere, more than he had expected. He heard a bleeping from behind him. Almost by instinct, he lunged behind a wall, just in time to avoid being blown up by a missile from the defense system.
   “Codeword: Master Fetussey,” Dr. Fetus said. The missile shooter deactivated. Dr. Fetus shuddered. That had been too close.
   He walked around the factory, until he found the control room, where he could edit all the processes in the factory. He immediately set it so that the weapons would only attack Meat Boy, to guarantee his, Brownie’s, and Bandage Girl’s safety.
   Having properly fixed up the factory, he turned on the intercom.
   “Brownie!” he called, his voice echoing across the factory. “Report to the factory control room immediately!”
   Dr. Fetus plopped into a chair to wait. He could tell it was almost time for his big reveal, so that his mother would finally know who had kidnapped her.
   Dr. Fetus shuddered, remembering when he had found her first...
   Young Dr. Fetus walked toward the sea. He had followed the trail, terrorizing and torturing people until they told him what they knew about his mother. When they told him outlived their usefulness, he killed them. And here he was now, heading toward a cottage by the sea.
   He knew who his father was: John Salt, owner and Foreman of the Salt Factory. Perhaps he could get his parents to love him again. He could repent, he could be whole once again!
   His mother, he had found out, had a cottage by the sea, which she loved, as it let her dream of the other two continents. Maybe they could take a ship to one of them, put all the chaos behind them.
   He could see the cottage in the distance, and began to run, a smile of true joy spreading across his face. They would be whole!
   “Mom!” he called, running faster. A family once again...
   And then she stepped out of the door, and he was stopped dead in his tracks. She was beautiful! He loved her, as a mother, but now...now it was more. Perhaps, just maybe...
   But someone else stepped out of the door. A man, a boy, a male who wasn’t his father!
   Dr. Fetus felt like someone had punched him in the stomach. She had betrayed him and his father, she had turned to someone else!
   His heart, already sore and twisted, shattered completely, leaving only a small chunk behind, a tiny piece, one that obsessed over Bandage Girl. He had to have her!
   “Isn’t this nice, Meat Boy?” he heard her say, in almost a dreamlike way.
   “Yes,” Meat Boy replied. He was holding her hand!
   A dark cloud boiled around Dr. Fetus. There would be no repairing of his family. She had betrayed them all, they could never be whole again, he could never be whole again.
   Dr. Fetus turned on his heel and dashed away, cursing in rage. There was nothing in the world for him. He hated all, and would destroy it in kind.
   “Sir?”  Brownie asked, coming into the room. “You called?”
   Dr. Fetus shook his head, knocking away the memories.
   “Yes,” Dr. Fetus said. “I want you to be familiar with this place, and to get in some more training. Who knows, maybe you could even add some more traps to the areas.”
   “Really?” Brownie said, looking eager. But a strange look came over him.
   “What is it?” Dr. Fetus asked.
   “Well, sir, you see, I watched Meat Boy, to see how he treated C.H.A.D after the battle. I’ve kind of grown attached to the little guy, see? He’s nice.”
   “Yes, yes.”
   “Well, what I saw, it kind of bothered me, sir. Meat Boy kicked my little C.H.A.D! Kicked him! How could he?”
   “Yes, I told you he was evil.”
   “Yeah, I agree. But...C.H.A.D had just tried to kill him, and afterwards, he went and tried to fix C.H.A.D. Didn’t do a very good job, though, so I had to go back and do better. He looks great now!”
   “That’s wonderful. So what’s bothering you?”
   “Well, sir, it’s just that... not to sound disrespectful, or anything...”
   “Come on, spit it out!”
   “Well, you aren’t treating Bandage Girl any better than he treated C.H.A.D, keeping her locked up, and hurting her whenever Meat Boy shows up.”
   Dr. Fetus was stunned. His minion was distrustful of him!
   “Listen, Brownie, I have my methods, and I’ll do it the way I want. Be comfortable in knowing that you are on the right side.”
   “Alright, sir,” Brownie said. But Dr. Fetus knew he wasn’t sure. Brownie would bear watching.

There you go, more info on the back-story of Dr. Fetus. Yes, Bandage Girl is his mother. That's what I've been getting at.

[Insani99999]

Nice story. Can't say I approve of Bandage Girl being his Mom, though. She doesn't seem that old. 

[NovaSilisko]

Nice story. Can't say I approve of Bandage Girl being his Mom, though. She doesn't seem that old. 

Yeah, agreed.

[carnivore-x]

Brownie looks just as old as Meat Boy, and in the game he was just came right out that minute. Dr. Fetus is still a fetus after who knows how long. Age doesn't matter. Look at Mario, video game characters don't age.  
Either way, in this story, that's just how old she is. Thanks for the criticism, but it's kind of pivotal to the story, so I don't think I'll change it. Oh well, sorry you don't like that.

[Insani99999]

I just read the chapter before the last, I first read the last then determined it was good so I started from the beginning.

I'm not quite sure about him having these lasers and floating... I liked him being a man of science, not a super powered villian. 

[carnivore-x]

Hmmm. I was wondering about that, how people would react. I'll think about it. The lasers are supposed to come from the suit hands, so I think it was just stuff he programmed into the suit (like a hand-held, mind-activated death ray) but couldn't fully unlock until then, because of the drug.  I'll make sure to put in some mentions of that in Chapter 3.5. That way, he still is scientific, just better than before, smarter. Missile launchers are way to easy to dodge!

Edit: I put in some mentions in chapter 2.5 about the suit. That way, it seems like he programmed it that way, not that he's super powered. Thanks for the constructive criticism, everybody. Very useful.

[MegaMew]

Needs moar Fetus on Meat Boy action 

[carnivore-x]

Needs moar Fetus on Meat Boy action 

You'll have to wait until the start of Chapter 4 (which I just started, by the way) for Dr. Fetus and Meat Boy to fight hand to hand, just like in the game. Don't worry, there is some more action coming, (like, in the next flash-back) and especially in Chapters 4 & 5. Dr. Fetus vs. the Demon Lord! Attack of the Zombie Meats! Ha-ha!  vs. 

Not to mention more things with 

Don't worry, I have a lot planned for this.

[MegaMew]

Yeah....fighting....that's what I meant when I said Fetus on Meat Boy....action and manly stuff...like....playing sport games...


yeah....

[carnivore-x]

I know what you meant, and it's not going to happen. I just took it to mean fighting, for the sake of it.  Also, I hate spectator sports. Except skiing, that's awesome.

[MegaMew]

I know what you meant, and it's not going to happen. I just took it to mean fighting, for the sake of it.  Also, I hate spectator sports. Except skiing, that's awesome.

I didn't want it to happen either, I was just going with the stereotypes around fanfics.  Also yay for not liking spectator sports.  Frisbee is the only one that's worthwhile or fun 

[carnivore-x]

Frisbee's a spectator sport?  News to me.
What stereotypes? There's only two fanfics on the whole forum.  (I'm not on that many other forums, which is why I wouldn't know)

[MegaMew]

Yeah, Ultimate is pretty big on most college campuses.  People enjoy spectating.  Spectator Sport 

[Devon Wargod]

this story seems to include thoughts much similar to mine

thus I approve